Not a bad movie...
But you need some work on it though. A suggestion for you: add sounds to each action the guy makes, charging the attacks, hitting the wall, etc. Also, when you make your next one, try to make movement a little more fluid. Everything was a little choppy. But in all actuality, not a bad first attempt! ^__^
Thanks! And I'll spend much more time on the quality next time.
All i have to say...
...is one word: epic. Even though that dosen't do it justice. I'm totally waiting for the next one!
okay, I don't know how to say this...
But that was TONS of fun! I mean seriously! The random respawn, the whole burly arms, and everything! Honestly, I thought the humor was funny, so keep it up mate!
Very Pink Floyd -esk.
That was very trippy! Just a question, what kind of drugs were you doing when you thought of this, and where can i find them? xP Over all, pritty good, but i'd try to make it a little bit creepier. the "Laugh Track," we'll call it, after a while got a little annoying. I don't know if that was your goal, but if it wasn't, that's a suggestion. Another thing you might consider to do is if you make another one like this, use music by Akira Yamoaka. That's the guy that did Silent Hill music. But, again, it's all yours. I liked it a lot, and I hope to see things that are just as good come from you soon! Take Care!
Here's what I got:
With all due respect, this is indeed an amature flash. Though it is somthing I probibly cannot do, I will still try to give you some pointers.
The first thing I would suggest is music. Since I myself am ADHD, i have a hard time sitting still. That can easily be tammed by music, which until the credits, was absent. A couple of Artists i'd suggest using for this kind of thing would be Rob Dougin (Matrix Agent Training), Akira Yamaoka (Silent Hill), Linkin Park, etc. But my suggestion will usually lead to an instramental track, so that way you can concentrate more on the flash, rather than the lyrics.
My second suggestion would be the buttons. I'd say try to deviate away from those, just cause it's a pain in the ass to try to click them. Most of the time, i'll want to watch a flash and do nothing else. I don't know if you have a microphone, but i'd also suggest trying to get vocals in the flash as well.
That's all i got out of it, with the exception of the story itself. However, that topic was already discussed, so there is no need to reintroduce it.
Good luck with your flash mate!
This has potential. It really didn't make much sense, but then again, it doesn't have to. As for the music, i noticed you only had it on the left speaker. It might help if it was in stereo, but again, that may be your style. Plus, try having a different style of music. It really didn't work for this kind of flash, and it sort of reminded me of reservoir dogs. If you're going for action, go for something like Strapping Young Lad, or even classical, like "The Duel of the Fates" (John Williams, Star wars Ep. 1). If you want some ideas for music, I might be able to help you out. ^_^ You do have potential. ^_^ Good luck in your endeavours
Very well done.
This is one of the most original flashes that i have come upon. I looked at it first thinking that it would be just another world wide virus thing, but i was proved wrong. ^_^ You stated in your comments that you needed music. the only place that music would fit well is at the end when said virus walks out. True, the sound effects could have been better, but the storyline and the graphics balanced it out well. ^_^ Very good work!
Frankly, I don't care if you think you did a good job or not. It is the thought that counts in this instance. You had a friend, and this friend obviously ment a lot to you. Otherwise you wouldn't have made this. The animation, true enough, isn't the best, but you have to be like another Adam Phillips in order to pull that off. I am sure she would be proud of you and think that you did a wonderful job in this flash. I hope to see more great things come from you. Good Luck.
There is more that you can do with this...
Alright, Here's the thing, This is a really good flash, however, there were a couple of problems with it. first problem that i saw was the loader button. only the border is a button, but that isn't too much of a biggie. Second thing that i think that you could have done better, there was little plot behind the killings. For example, one of the things that you could have done is kill the first one off, then when the big dude lands, shoot to his eyes, like you did, but have a faster motion. then have a quick flashback of why he's doing this. for instance, you could have him in a room and these two demon girls come and beat the crap out of him. then they leave him for dead. or another idea is that you could have them kill his entire family. what i am basically trying to say is that when i watched it, i had no idea why he was killing them. elaborate on it a little more, and then it will be a lot better. You did good. I hope to see more and better things come from you! ^_^
The first thing that I would like to touch upon is the "camera position." Each time that mario came out, it seemed like it was a close up. after a while, it got a little too repetitive, and eventually i didn't like that part. So in responce to that part, I suggest rather than having infanant close ups, to have a whole big picture shots, and a couple close ups, so the viewer, or in this case me, dosen't feel so cramped. But other than that, I found this submission to be very well done, as well as have some classic humor from mario. Thank you for submitting it and showing it to the rest of the world, as such, I hope they like it too.
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